In a huge, gigantic, and beautiful lake, there are many kinds of animals that are roaming peacefully around the giant feature; the fresh water blue lake. I, a very person- minded person, with my friends, had decided to go visiting and traveling to the clear and icy lake. Once arriving by the old- engine car, everyone's view was surprised by the wonderfulness everywhere. It was fabulous all around the icy, blue, shiny water. Then, ready from some work to be taken, my friends and I had put all stuffs to set the tent and some other supplies to have to survive and have fun in quietness and peacefulness. Being ready, we went swimming in the lake for a short period of time to have some fun. After swimming together, my peers and I went hiking to the closest mountain we could see, which was named for and famous. It was a long and breath- taking walk from the starting point to the end.
As the day became darker, everyone could see the entire moon and the bright stars in each and every corner. While the star watching, sitting and lying by the fire, we, together, had ate marshmallows, cookies, and hot chocolate. It was a delicious snack. Chatterbox as we were, we all laughed and talked all the time. When time went by, my friends and I each went inside the tent to rest and have some sleep for the day. The day, which is today, was such extremely fantastic, by being with my friends. Sky watching, swimming in the lake, hiking on the mountain, eating deliciously made food by fire, and camping was the thing each of us did. It was the best day ever!!!!
Well written, Angelina. I can see you like to write: you're very expressive, and you risk new sentence structures with more involved punctuation. Excellent! One thing to focus on in future writing pieces is carefully proofreading your piece for minor grammatical flaws. Still, great work! Mr. P
ReplyDeleteI like the story but I personally like some scary stories or comments when camping and sitting around the fire. But the story is awesome, in my opinion!
ReplyDeleteSuch a hard cute story. I like it buut its long!!!!!hahahahahahaha
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